I like what nhpw said about taking out the vampire references. Also about the idea for veiled biblical references -- I think that's a great idea. With the creepy religious themes you have going, that'd be perfect, and it'd hit just the right note of creepy-without-resorting-to-blood-and-gore. Classy-creepy, if you will.
I'll start thinking about Bible references, laments, curses, prophesies, although at this point, it probably would have behooved me to have been following this draft so far, so I can see what Janos's "hardcore religious" changes were. Is there anything he quotes or says that might work for a title? Any Latin prayer phrases that might be used to ward of vampires, or as a plea for God's mercy or protection?
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Date: 2011-04-01 03:58 pm (UTC)I'll start thinking about Bible references, laments, curses, prophesies, although at this point, it probably would have behooved me to have been following this draft so far, so I can see what Janos's "hardcore religious" changes were. Is there anything he quotes or says that might work for a title? Any Latin prayer phrases that might be used to ward of vampires, or as a plea for God's mercy or protection?