This is why I'm so glad I've got a few people reading this, because I went back and forth between this and what I wrote while I was hashing out this scene. Seeing the actual action would definitely be more cinematic, but I was thinking that maybe it was creepier to just hear it? I like both versions, so I'll probably see if anyone else chimes in. Let the audience decide!
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Date: 2010-12-28 04:24 pm (UTC)