nenya_kanadka: thin elegant black cartoon cat ([fandom] Delenn Lennier)
nenya_kanadka ([personal profile] nenya_kanadka) wrote in [personal profile] kungfuwaynewho 2012-02-16 03:52 am (UTC)

Oh, interesting, iiiinteresting. I like how you manage to show John's (very reasonable) depression and also give the story a sense of movement. Their relationship is changing oh so slowly over time. I like that she wants to make him happy, even though that's almost creepier than if she didn't give a damn, because she's also still thinking of him like a pet or a prisoner.

It may be wrong to find the last section hot, but I did. Well done.

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