Oh, interesting, iiiinteresting. I like how you manage to show John's (very reasonable) depression and also give the story a sense of movement. Their relationship is changing oh so slowly over time. I like that she wants to make him happy, even though that's almost creepier than if she didn't give a damn, because she's also still thinking of him like a pet or a prisoner.
It may be wrong to find the last section hot, but I did. Well done.
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It may be wrong to find the last section hot, but I did. Well done.