Those were two of my macro notes from my read through! That Mira/Dominik was too much of a given, and that Samuel disappears for wayyyyyy too long. So I'm glad those work out better.
(The Samuel thing especially was troubling, and I have this huge note to myself in the middle of my revision manifesto in all caps: IT IS OKAY TO CUT AWAY FROM YOUR PROTAGONIST NOT EVERYTHING HAS TO BE AN OMG MOMENT FOR MIRA. So, like, I was saving all that so it would be this big surprise when she sees him in the castle, because I always unintentionally conflate surprise for the character with surprise for the reader. Then I remind myself of Hitchcock's definition of shock vs. suspense and it works much better.)
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(The Samuel thing especially was troubling, and I have this huge note to myself in the middle of my revision manifesto in all caps: IT IS OKAY TO CUT AWAY FROM YOUR PROTAGONIST NOT EVERYTHING HAS TO BE AN OMG MOMENT FOR MIRA. So, like, I was saving all that so it would be this big surprise when she sees him in the castle, because I always unintentionally conflate surprise for the character with surprise for the reader. Then I remind myself of Hitchcock's definition of shock vs. suspense and it works much better.)