I like that Mira and Dominik have more scenes together in this new draft. It builds their relationship more; I know it's a mother-child relationship and that should just be a given that she would care for him, but this I think helps the reader (viewer?) care about them more, so it should carry more weight when they're separated (which I assume is still going to happen?)
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THANK YOU for showing Samuel again! This makes him feel more connected to the story, so he's not just all of a sudden at the castle, leaving us to figure out how he got there.
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THANK YOU for showing Samuel again! This makes him feel more connected to the story, so he's not just all of a sudden at the castle, leaving us to figure out how he got there.