One last thought before bed: it wasn't 100% clear to me while reading what exactly Janos's motivation was in wanting Mira around. I mean, sure, he says stuff about companionship, but I wasn't sure I believed him. If you decide to emphasize that theme of possession, I'm not sure how, but maybe make sure it's really clear what his real motivations are as pertains to her. With Bathory and Beta it's pretty obvious, since she'd fit very clearly into certain roles in their lives.
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