(Holly is like, huh? And I'm like, watch Babylon 5.)
*g* lols :D
We'll talk more later about how I can repay you three for all you've done.
Stop that nonsense. It was fun!!
[reads]
LOVED IT! Loved it loved it loved it. The whole catacombs fire bier EVERYTHING. Love.
That’s why you pretended to be martyred
Is he what the village thought was their patron saint? I thought he was just hiding his own stuff in there instead of the patron saint's, which he'd just thrown out or something. Sorry -- it was probably clear, I am just so tiredeypants right now.
JANOS The Lord’s name means everything to me! I fought for Him, killed countless infidels, reclaimed the Holy Land in His name! I thought I would be rewarded, but His face has always been turned away from me. I have been cursed since the moment of my birth. Cursed, and alone.
THAT is fascinating. You're good at creating whole new mythologies. That's rare.
I liked the questionable exchange with Beta at the end. Is it going to be clear which parts are her speaking and which parts are Janos, not quite dead yet? (We're supposed to be assuming she does actually go back and finish him off, yes?) Or was it just meant to be reminiscent of him?
Although it's sort of sad, I liked Beta's ending. Things still ended generally well, but it sticks with you more than a perfect happy ending.
Have we seen before evidence of Bathory/Janos/Beta changing into an animal before? Maybe yes and I just forgot, but if not, the hawk bit seems a bit out of the blue, if really cool imagery.
[...]
Kaaayyy, sorry to be a broken record, but I'm still not convinced Samuel had to die. I could see him trudging back through the snow long about the time the women have just gotten back, this blessedly welcome sight, boggled and worried because there'd been some sort of wall of magic and he hadn't been able to get through to the village and was everyone all right? Like if he dies, he should be a *really* strong motivating factor, and I feel like Mira was already pretty motivated. If more motivatin is required, maybe rescue motivation, like if Janos had gotten ahold of Beta a little earlier or if he still had Dominik? IDK, I don't need to completely change your script. But Samuel's death seems maybe a little pointless.
...I am trying very hard to separate my hopeless romantic reflex from my artistic editing response. I think I've succeeded, but my motivations are I admit a bit convoluted.
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*g* lols :D
We'll talk more later about how I can repay you three for all you've done.
Stop that nonsense. It was fun!!
[reads]
LOVED IT! Loved it loved it loved it. The whole catacombs fire bier EVERYTHING. Love.
That’s why you pretended to be martyred
Is he what the village thought was their patron saint? I thought he was just hiding his own stuff in there instead of the patron saint's, which he'd just thrown out or something. Sorry -- it was probably clear, I am just so tiredeypants right now.
JANOS
The Lord’s name means everything to me! I fought
for Him, killed countless infidels, reclaimed the
Holy Land in His name! I thought I would be rewarded,
but His face has always been turned away from
me. I have been cursed since the moment
of my birth. Cursed, and alone.
THAT is fascinating. You're good at creating whole new mythologies. That's rare.
I liked the questionable exchange with Beta at the end. Is it going to be clear which parts are her speaking and which parts are Janos, not quite dead yet? (We're supposed to be assuming she does actually go back and finish him off, yes?) Or was it just meant to be reminiscent of him?
Although it's sort of sad, I liked Beta's ending. Things still ended generally well, but it sticks with you more than a perfect happy ending.
Have we seen before evidence of Bathory/Janos/Beta changing into an animal before? Maybe yes and I just forgot, but if not, the hawk bit seems a bit out of the blue, if really cool imagery.
[...]
Kaaayyy, sorry to be a broken record, but I'm still not convinced Samuel had to die. I could see him trudging back through the snow long about the time the women have just gotten back, this blessedly welcome sight, boggled and worried because there'd been some sort of wall of magic and he hadn't been able to get through to the village and was everyone all right? Like if he dies, he should be a *really* strong motivating factor, and I feel like Mira was already pretty motivated. If more motivatin is required, maybe rescue motivation, like if Janos had gotten ahold of Beta a little earlier or if he still had Dominik? IDK, I don't need to completely change your script. But Samuel's death seems maybe a little pointless.
...I am trying very hard to separate my hopeless romantic reflex from my artistic editing response. I think I've succeeded, but my motivations are I admit a bit convoluted.