Yeah, I'm not awesome with Act Three pacing, so I have no doubt that things will get shuffled around once I'm done. Which is the drawback of presenting material while it's in the process of being written.

(*UNLESS*, of course, he's not really dead, and is going to come back...??? :):):)

You're adorable. :D

One random little detail: the old man refers to "mama" -- I wonder if by his age he wouldn't just refer to her as "my mother" or "my mama" -- the perspective and distance that comes with age or whatever?

Yeah... I actually had "my mama" written, and changed it when I typed it up. I went back and forth on it. The thing that swayed me was actually having dinner with my grandpa last night, and he was telling stories of all the produce he and his brothers stole as kids, and how their mom would cook them up, and he consistently would say, like, "And then we brought home our bushel of rhubarb and Mom made a bunch of pies."

So I don't know, heh. I think it may be one of those where I have to hear how it sounds when my writer's group reads it out loud. (They're up to Mira and Ilka rescuing Dominik from the dungeon.)