Damn my lack of self discipline, I just read it even though I'm at work. (It was so short! It didn't take long! Please don't fire me!)

Good stuff! I like how you're constantly stretching into non-traditional, not overdone vampire territory -- no stakes or garlic or anything. And there are always such pretty-in-a-creepy-way, atmospheric, gothic images -- the crystal vial of the blood of a martyr, etc.

One detail you probably already caught (but just in case) is that I think there were candles at their first dinner together... their flames got strangely stretched a la creepy enchantmenty stuff when she looked at them.