http://nhpw.livejournal.com/ ([identity profile] nhpw.livejournal.com) wrote in [personal profile] kungfuwaynewho 2010-12-13 03:16 pm (UTC)

I can definitely see how this would fit better as "show, don't tell" exposition very early in the story - it's creepy that I can pretty well draw a line between what you would move back to Act 1 and what would stay here.

Some of this might even be easily covered in your opening scene with the images.

You had said at one point that Mira's story follows the path of the classic hero's journey, so now I'm trying to figure out where Janos fits into that. Mentor?

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