Ho-Kay...I'm gonna skip around a bit 'cause my brain is still trying to take it all in. To start, John wearing Delenn's pin to keep a part of Delenn with him, definitely a *sniff* moment. You had a line that I thought was lovely and a perfectly accurate description of Delenn: "Deceptively innocent, yet dangerous." Thank you for having the return of the lights be realistic and making everyone temporarily blinded until their eyes readjusted. Any time the lights come back on after walking around on emergency lighting at work for extended periods of time, for me, really is a harsh adjustment. Zack's little passage about Sheridan returning the lights to power was a little bit of 'O Captain, My Captain' but was really fitting never-the-less. There really is a weird bond between captain and crew. So you had this great build-up of anticipation while I was reading noticing Delenn and John's locations and time gaps got closer and closer together and then they just miss each other on the stairwell. I was literally yelling at my computer screen as if Delenn could somehow hear me saying "No! Go back, it's John! Turn the f*ck around!" Which is just more proof that I'm either insane or you are one damned good writer, I'll go with the latter. ;) Once again we're left with a character's life in peril. I like the set up on how it's going to have to be Delenn to be the shining knight in armor (er, lingerie). Now I really do have to wait for the next installment. :(
A little aside, reading this story to Nightwish-10th Man Down has helped create a lot of atmosphere. :)
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Thank you for having the return of the lights be realistic and making everyone temporarily blinded until their eyes readjusted. Any time the lights come back on after walking around on emergency lighting at work for extended periods of time, for me, really is a harsh adjustment.
Zack's little passage about Sheridan returning the lights to power was a little bit of 'O Captain, My Captain' but was really fitting never-the-less. There really is a weird bond between captain and crew.
So you had this great build-up of anticipation while I was reading noticing Delenn and John's locations and time gaps got closer and closer together and then they just miss each other on the stairwell. I was literally yelling at my computer screen as if Delenn could somehow hear me saying "No! Go back, it's John! Turn the f*ck around!" Which is just more proof that I'm either insane or you are one damned good writer, I'll go with the latter. ;)
Once again we're left with a character's life in peril. I like the set up on how it's going to have to be Delenn to be the shining knight in armor (er, lingerie). Now I really do have to wait for the next installment. :(
A little aside, reading this story to Nightwish-10th Man Down has helped create a lot of atmosphere. :)